I left you a comment on the kaisooproject post on the original version so here I'll just respond to some of the things we've talked about - first of all I really liked what you added, like the conversation in the kitchen (you added that right?) and everything just made their relationship that much more gradual and organic - it was really good! Also you fleshed out chanhun a LOT and they're such a dynamic pairing here - it's delicious. And I just really can't understand at all why people call this fluff. It's not fluff. It's magical and romantic and sad and textured and delicious. But it's not fluff. And I don't think it's just because I'm reading it with the visual palette of the movie in my head. There's a lot of darkness here, tucked in the corners, with Jongin's golden hope to light the way.