Snowstorm

[lotusk]

Title: Snowstorm
Rating: PG-13
Pairing: Sehun/Luhan
Length: 2059 words
Summary: Sehun is just trying to enjoy the snowstorm but Luhan won't let him.
Notes: For teatimetaemint. Happy SUPER Belated Birthday, Jenni! I decided to write some cranky SeLu for you and I hope you like it! It was supposed to be a drabble but it kinda ended up being 2k, I’m so sorry orz.


Sehun groaned at the interruption. Of course. Only Luhan could have destroyed a perfectly idyllic moment of contemplation quite so completely. Of course, only Luhan could have such monumentally shitty timing. It was a gift. Truly. Keeping his eyes on the tempest beyond the glass, Sehun ignored the banging and shouting.

Comments

[exollent.livejournal.com]

pops in
i heard selu was on the agenda here

omg i loved this so much, i love lu han being written like this, as in quirky and dumb and cute ;; and the way sehun melts so easily for him fufufufu yessssss good okay ♥

[lotusk]

Thank you for reading this silliness lmao!!!

[teatimetaemint.livejournal.com]

I already screamed at you over this, but I need to scream a bit more. JUST EVERYTHING ABOUT THIS MAKES ME SO FREAKIN HAPPY!
THEIR DYNAMIC
SEHUN ACTING CRANKY EVEN THOUGH HE'S ACTUALLY HAPPY TO HAVE LUHAN THERE (because he's HEAD OVER HEALS IN LOVE WITH LUHAN)
SHAMELESS LUHAN
SNARKY SHAMELESS ACTOR LUHAN
SHAMELESS ACTOR LUHAN PUTTING HIS HANDS ON SEHUN ANY CHANCE HE GETS
SEHUN LOVING EVERY SECOND OF IT
SEHUN BEING UNABLE TO ACT OUT THE SCENE WITH LUHAN BECAUSE IT HURTS/SCARES HIM TO WATCH LUHAN SLIP INTO THAT ROLE BECAUSE WHAT IF IT WERE REAL WHAT IF LUHAN GOT HURT
THE CUDDLING
THE BICKERING
THE KISSING
COLLARBONES
SEHUN FEELING HAPPY AND SECURE WHILE WATCHING THE SNOW OUTSIDE AND THINKING ABOUT HIS FUTURE WITH LUHAN

ADELE MY HEART!!!!!

Sehun was about to turn around and investigate when Luhan's arms wrapped around his waist—his collarbones pressing into Sehun's shoulder blades like they'd always been meant to go together, like they belonged. Exhaling brokenly, Sehun closed his eyes and allowed himself to sink, ever so slowly, into his boyfriend's embrace.
/clutches chest
OH GOD HELP DO YOU KNOW WHAT YOU'RE DOING TO ME WITH THIS?!

Luhan's laugh vibrated pleasantly against his skin, and Sehun was reminded of how much he hated Luhan sometimes (mostly because he didn't hate him at all).
Oh goooooooood, all these feelings! I was sitting on the train and it took everything I had in me to keep myself from making the most embarrassing noises. (I'm pretty sure I looked constipated.)

Also Luhan acting all confident and brash, but then there are those flashes of insecurity and tenderness and I just love love LOVE the way you wrote him. I love the way you wrote those two together, the way they interacted, the way they just fit, even though it might not look like it at first glance. There was so much amazingness and depth to that relationship and I LOVED IT SO MUCH! I know I keep repeating myself, but that's just how much I adored it.
You said you have no experience with writing Selu, but you did such an excellent job. This is my absolute favorite way to portray them, to make them clash, to make them fit so beautifully nevertheless /SIGHS HAPPILY

The writing, the interactions, the pure chemistry, interlaced with so much heart-warming tenderness - just everything about this made me smile and feel great AND THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR WRITING SUCH A WONDERFUL STORY FOR ME AND MY BEAUTIFUL OTP. I'll reread it again before Christmas (and probably many times more) and I just know it'll make me feel this warm, happy glow inside again and again.
This was just perfect, Adele ;_____; I love you so much for writing this for me, for including all the things I love. YOU'RE THE BESTEST UNNIE IN THIS WHOLE UNIVERSE ♡

[lotusk]

I would have loved to have been on the train with you and seen your reactions LOL. I'm so glad you liked it. Idw it to just be fluff with no depth, or sarcasm with no heart. I think I managed to find a balance - I hope I did lol. It just makes me so happy that you noticed all your things I slipped in for you ^^ I love you lots, Jenni! You are the BESTEST DONGSAENG IN THIS WHOLE UNIVERSE! Enjoy your gift and I'm sorry it's so late!

[read0write.livejournal.com]

wah~~~~~~~~~~~~~
the adorable selu heeheehee
that was great, wonderful heeheehee
i enjoyed it :)

[lotusk]

Thank you, Tiffany!!

[bluedreaming]

I feel sorry that I didn't read this when you posted it, first I got mixed up with shiritori and then I lost track of my time (my fault!) but I feel more sorry for myself for missing out because this is glorious.

I don't know I can ever find the words to explain in way in which you'll believe that I meant it when I say I love your writing style, your intensity of character and emotion--there's a vividness to your characters that brings them to life and I think this particular story showcases this excellently. On the surface level, one might be tempted to say, "Oh, another cute and fluffy domestic piece," and leave it at that. And that would be okay, because this is a cute and fluffy domestic piece, that's a part of it, and it's a very good part. But that's not all, and that's not what any of your stories are. Because you dig down deeply into your characters, so that even a simple turn of events is imbued with a certain depth and complexity, because the characters are not simple facsimiles of "A" and "B" but rather full characters, who hint at a full backdrop of history and emotions and personality, even if the setting and scene is a small one, a mere glimpse as it were of a larger whole. Yours are truly character-driven stories.

You set the stage, by establishing Sehun's inner balance, before clashing him with Lu Han, a contrast to highlight the difference in their characters, the contrast between cold outside and warm inside, quiet and loud, from the beginning the story has a dynamic narrative without needing to resort to soap opera melodramatics, because life at its root is dramatic and vibrant, because everyone is a complete person with a complex character and a different internal environment from which their actions are drawn.

Sehun says one thing but we know, treated to his internal thoughts, that he means quite another, the contrast between interior and exterior carry the story, as the reader is carried along, as it were, as Sehun illustrates, in a way, how he possibly first fell in love with Lu Han, first the chaotic first impression, the reader lulled by Sehun's calm internal thoughts before Lu Han barges in, and perhaps that was also Sehun's first impression, when they first met. We can't know, but it seems likely. Sehun is dragged along with the reader, mixed impressions of Lu Han but laid over a deep and enduring fondness, the way in which you introduce what we learn later is an established relationship keeps the dynamic fresh and engaging. It's not "Sehun and Lu Han who have been dating for blah-blah years and they have a nice snow day at home" but rather you take the reader along as we meet Lu Han through Sehun's eyes, the rude awakening and the reluctant softening ending in a vast affection, a deep love demonstrated through the little things, like Sehun being unable to keep picturing Lu Han hurt.

You didn't fade the story into softness either, the snow falling outside the window as they cuddle on the couch and night falls, but rather left the reader with a small tension, a piece of unresolved narrative to mull over, not a cliff-hanger but rather a small note that keeps the story from being tied up and packaged and soon forgotten. As the story ends, Sehun is pondering his next step in the relationship, further cementing the metaphor of this winter encounter as an illustration of Sehun's relationship with Lu Han in general, and the reader is left with a note of forward momentum as the curtain falls.

I'm sorry for rambling, I really very much enjoyed this story, but more than that, I found it to be an excellent example of why I like your writing so much, and I really hope that it makes even a modicum of sense!

[lotusk]

This is hardly rambling!!!! Your comments always make me cry ISTG ;;;; if ever I feel down about my writing I'll come and reread this comment so I can soak up some comfort and shore up some confidence. Thank you for taking the time to put all this down - I'm so grateful for you, I don't even know how to tell you ;;;; ily you lots, ansabear /rolls all over you crying

[bluedreaming]

Well I meant every bit ^^ and if it gives you confidence to read it and keep going then I'm glad ^^ i love you too <3

[lotusk]

/hugs you forever ;;;;